Poster design: comments?

[solarbird]

The Wayward wants the poster art tomorrow; I want to get it photocopied this afternoon if I can. I've got a first go at it under the lj-cut. Thoughts?

eta: Original version still under the cut, latest version here.

Comments

[jonathankorman.livejournal.com]

Really, it's the caption “rage-driven acoustic elfmetal” that sells it for me.

[solarbird]

Honestly, that's how I think of it. No lie.

[seferin.livejournal.com]

Only comment is the gun barrel. Looks slightly like it's pointed at her head. Can you extend it to just under the text? Otherwise, looks great.

[solarbird]

Wow, I totally don't see this, but you're not the only one, so I've tilted it a bit further away. Thanks!

[maellenkleth]

Mmm, not bad for a self-portrait, and 'rage-drive' is definitely truth-in-advertising. Flash-suppressor needs some longitudinal slots, though. ^_^

Elane the (occasional) armourer

oh you gun people and your weaponry details

[solarbird]

thanks!

Re: oh you gun people and your weaponry details

[maellenkleth]

well, seeing as how it ought to be a basic skill, wanna go out to Ft Lewis sometime and shoot off a few boxes in the model village? it can be arranged....

Re: oh you gun people and your weaponry details

[solarbird]

Oh I've been shooting several times. I'm even a member of the Royal Hawai'ian Shooting Club! But it's not really my thing. I much prefer archery.

Re: oh you gun people and your weaponry details

[maellenkleth]

Heh, should send you a picture of my bow, sometime. Don't shoot much with it, as there is not much opportunity in Canada, but all the same, whizzzzzzzzzz kerCHUNK is a nice set of noises.

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[janabard.livejournal.com]

Hey, Dara-- gorgeous picture! I agree with Seferin, that the gun looks a little too much pointed at the head (since the hair has so much nice volume). Maybe just a teeny bit more on the "f" in elfmetal, since I first saw it as an "l". ("Elemental metal?" I thought.) All-in-all, a very striking poster. Wish I could come up to WA to see you!

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[solarbird]

Thanks! I'm actually stealing from myself, it's an old print.

Yeah, the F in this font is kinda weak. I've added a fake crossbar that makes it clearer. (Also widened the line spacing a little.) And I totally don't see the pointed-at-the-head thing, but I've tilted the flash suppressor a little bit away and I think that solves what I think you're seeing. Thanks!

Re: (Here from Facebook)

[solarbird]

Here, updated - is the gun thing fixed?

Re: (Here from Facebook)

[janabard.livejournal.com]

Yes! :-)

Re: (Here from Facebook)

[solarbird]

Oh good. I figured so but.

[phillipalden.livejournal.com]

I like it!

[solarbird]

Thanks!

[lyonesse.livejournal.com]

i want a poster! :)

[solarbird]

300 dpi no-compression jpg posted!